Prose Critique #20
Use a character's past as a lens for the present
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Welcome to Prose Critique, in which I critique an excerpt for grammar and style. Style is subjective, so my notes won’t resonate with everyone, but I hope that they’ll help writers learn how to focus their writing to convey meaning in the boldest, clearest, most interesting way possible.
In this excerpt, a student named Isabel gets a rare job opportunity from her law professor. My notes mostly focus on weaving in hints about Isabel’s past so that we understand her reaction to her sudden stroke of good luck.